25/09/15
Glen Innes School
Room 11
Dear Mrs Parkes
As you have helped us over the year, I have learnt more. Writing a descriptive paragraph has been easier for me since the beginning of this year. Starting the descriptive paragraph before the introduction was a great tip.
The 4 x 4 poem was interesting and fun. The difficult part for me was finding the correct word to contribute as the adverb. It was new for me and I enjoy learning new things. As you should know, we created a comic strip about our difficulties on writing a 4 x 4 poem and posted it on our blog.
When we did our combined story about the attributes, I now understand what some of the attributes mean. Like courteous, it means being polite, using your manners and listening to others.
The diamante poem was very easy to do. Our diamante poem was about the black piranha and I found it easy to find the nouns, adjectives and adverbs. I didn’t complete the bottom half of my diamante poem because I had to edit our movie for Manaiakalani.
I would just like to say thank you for all the suggestions that you have given us to improve on our writing, especially descriptive writing. I still need help on descriptive paragraphs because I do not include the senses.
Yours sincerely
Shanelle
4 comments:
Kia Ora Shanelle
I liked working with Ms Parkes because she helped me get my writing better. I hope she did the same to you. I think your writing is better because I enjoy reading your writing. What did you like when Ms Parkes helped us?
Kia Ora Shanelle
I really like Descriptive writing on the Black Piranha it was my favourite piece of writing. What was your favourite piece because in your letter you never said what your favourite was?
Shanelle I too like working in your class. I think it is great that you like writing. Many students I work with find writing difficult whether it be narratives, paragraphs, poetry or persuasive writing. If I have made the process easier for you then that it great. I look forward to working with you again either this term or in 2016.
Ohhhh I didn't proof read my work before I published it. Can you find the error Shannelle? ...... I meant to say ... If I have made the process easier for you then that is great.
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